Do you agree or diagree?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similiar to their parents' job than to choose jobs which are very different from their parents' jobs.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every one is different from others. Even twins have different habits , tastes and opinions in their life. Every one has rights to choose his/her own field of interest to do a kind of job. A child might have different school of thought then his parents. Therefore, I disagree that children should choose the same job as their parents do.
To begin with, children might have interests in different fields than their family members.I think that if a person has interest in various fields, he can be more successful. For instance, most of the members in my family are in the computer field. One of my cousins has a degree in computer science. He is an engineer, yet he is also interested in cooking. One day he quit his job as an engineer and created his own cafe. Today he is an owner of one of the most successful and popular restaurants in Armenia, even though none of my family members has ever thought of opening a restaurant.Thus, interest matters a lot of than doing the same job as the parents do.
Secondly, diversity of fields will increase in family if children choose a different job. Family members can have variety of topics for discussion because of diversity in fields. For example. one of my friends is a dentist. His father is a professor. His mother works at library. Whenever I visit his home I observe that they never stick to one topic. As a matter of fact, they have varieties in opinion and point of the views that I generally like. Therefore, it will be more fun in the family if everyone is from different field.
To sum up, choices and interests are essential parts to build a successful career. Parents would like to see their children at summit in their lives. However, it is possible only when children have their own interest and choice. Thus, I strongly believe that children should choose different jobs from their parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a matter of fact, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66463414634 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5642292891 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487804878049 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4358690083 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.5217391304 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2608695652 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69565217391 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253589590118 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782334372028 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951340372406 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186707624752 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804523532542 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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