Do you agree or disagree with the following paragraphs? Movies and television have a more negative effect than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, technology is being developed at a galloping rate. Movies and television are facilities which most young people use them to spend their leisure time. It is a controversial argument between experts and parents whether these objects have a positive impact on youth or not. In my opinion, the effect of equipment like television is positive rather than negative. In the following paragraphs, I will explore into the most conspicuous reason and examples justifying my point of view.
To begin with, the director of movies or television programs has to make a program based on a specific curriculum, which means they have to consider details that are included in the program that are regulated with youths or not. This strict law is organized for directors to prevent a bad influence on young people in society. Furthermore, directors can determine a specific age for watching their programs. For example, in my country, there is an organization that has rigid rules for movies that are going to show in cinemas. They conceive all aspects to hamper from any disturbance for youths in community because they are more vulnerable to many problems that can make for them. As a result, most movies are under the control, strictly to reduce the negative effects of these facilities on young people, although there are many different ways in countries to curb this important issue.
My second noteworthy reason is that youths are using equipment mostly in their break time, which means they look to these objects like entertainment to spend their leisure time happily. A program on television can have a strong effect on youth if they put all their focus on that special program, but most young people unlikely not like this manner. Moreover, if they imitate those specific actions in their real life, we can contemplate that the program has a negative consequence on youths. My own example is a compelling example of this. I saw a horror movie at the weekend, which was not appropriate for my age, but I watched it just to enjoy my time, and release my energy with that movie. It did not any good or bad effect on me, because I did not concentrate on it, too much.
To sum up, movies and television can have a negative and positive impact on youths in which the positive effects are more than negative. This is because there is much organization that their duties are to watch programs and eliminate some parts of it that are not proper for everyone, and most youths watch television to spend their time happily.
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Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, so, as to, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83833718245 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63244396192 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471131639723 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2323340365 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.263157895 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235891946554 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817191139735 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701053220682 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169402449451 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311923661415 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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