TPO 53
In this modern era, technology is being developed at a galloping rate which its effect is demonstrated in the family's life. Governments are trying to solve peoples' problems to approach society to the culmination of its goals. It is a controversial argument between experts whether the government should spend money to improve internet access or improve public transportation. In my opinion, the government has to spend more money to enhance the pace and quality of internet access rather than public transportation. In the following paragraphs, I will explore into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
To begin with, most of the works such as trading, contracting with companies in other countries, and social networks are working with the internet, which means it can affect the revenue of the government to spend it on public matters. The size of the world has decreased because many people can access each other from far distances that can impress the communication between individuals, and particularly companies to be in contact to purchase their products. In this way, the government can gain a lot of money to improve public issues like public transportation. For example, in my country, the government provides an appropriate condition for small companies to make an agreement with companies in other countries with the internet. This action is not only decreased the costs to meet each other face to face but also made a good contract to enter a lot of money which the government can use it to improve the quality of public transportation. This example reveals that improving internet access can affect all other issues.
My second noteworthy reason is that peoples' concern is internet access in this period instead of public transportation. Most people are working with the internet to solve their problems, contact each other by social networks, and access the news that it seems the internet is a crucial part of their lives. As a result, they demand to improve internet access, and governments as an organization which their duties are to provide a perfect situation for people, have to react to this matter, immediately.
To sum up, enhancing internet access is more important than improving public transportation. This is because the government can earn money on the internet to spend it on public transportation, and peoples demand to have a better internet connection rather than public transportation.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, as to, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19899244332 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02202554002 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458438287154 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0995062345 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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