TPO 53 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
it is critically important that governments choose the best way to invest. In my opinion, I believe that governments should spend much more money the internet access rather than public transportation. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, spending money on internet access is more effective than on public transportation. To be more specific, these days, using the internet enables people to advance and improve every field of life. thanks to the development of the internet, many people can do many things without going to work or school. my personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I first moved to Istanbul, I was using the subway to commute and I was on the road for about two hours every single day. my company executives decided to home-office all company employees this year. my colleagues and I are extremely pleased with in this case because we can do most of our work from home without going to work. Now, we have two extra hours to play sports or spend time with our families instead of using public transit. I believe that this situation will eventually reduce reliance on public transport in the future. If the government did not provide the necessary infrastructure, we would not be able to benefit from these opportunities.
Furthermore, states could revenue much more than public transport by supporting internet access and could create huge GDP. Today, most of the company is increasingly selling their products through online websites, which enables to sell in their goods overseas. amazon, where I shop frequently, is a compelling example of this. Even though I live in Turkey, I can easily buy a product that is not in my country from the other side of the world thanks to amazon. Therefore, as the amazon company reaches many customers around the world, the company's profits are increasing regularly every year. this situation means more taxes for the government, it generates more income and contributes significantly to the welfare of its country. In addition, Undoubtedly, with the increase in events such as e-learning and home-office, people will use public transportation less than in past. Thus, global warming, which is one of the most important problems of our age, will decrease.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government's improvements of the internet infrastructures are myriad benefits. this is because the internet becomes evident that it will continue to gain popularity in the foreseeable future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11835748792 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92320932293 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536231884058 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.223127882 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.1304347826 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284866075181 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777542567115 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867828293896 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180310080431 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543395448487 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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