Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
tv is a popular medium that people use both for entertainment and information. this magic box equally appeals to adults and children, causing them to spend a considerable amount of time in front of it. however, people, especially parents, are increasingly questioning whether it is a curse or boon. In my opinion, I believe that tv and movies are highly harmful to minors. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the most prominent adverse effect of tv is obvious on children’s health. children are born with minimal health defects and preserve their good health during most of their childhood thanks to the latest developments in modern medicine such as cutting-edge newborn baby care units and regular vaccines. however, as time goes by, their health deteriorates due to not only environmental factors but also bad eating habits. it goes even without saying that tv directly contributes to both. The children overly exposed to long hours of tv, first, compromise their eyesight. this fact is supported by the increasing number of children who wear glasses. Additionally, spending long hours in front of the tv encourages children to eat more than they need and to stay indoors rather than doing physical activities, and thereby failing to burn their calories and increasing the risk of obesity.
Furthermore, consuming too much time in front of the screen promotes violence among the young. violence is the act of hurting others and harming their bodies and properties or even attacking them. Indeed, teens who do not learn these behaviors from their parents, are influenced by tv films. Since they can not tell fiction from fact, tv changes their nature. Statistics show that teens who watch violent movies are inclined to aggressive behavior. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. Last month, I had a big family reunion, which all of my relatives got together on my wife’s birthday. during this event, I was able to see my nephew watching a movie on tv. A few minutes later, my nephew and sister were fighting in front of the tv. The problem was that there were scenes and sounds of killing people and bad words in the movie. I felt so offended, and it was totally unexpected about this situation, I immediately told my brother about this, and he and his wife were really shocked as they had never met such a situation before. they decided to use parental control apps to protect their children away from these inconvenient contents.
In conclusion, too much screen time is damaging to children’s health and social life. Therefore, parents should bear in their minds that they should keep their children away from the tv.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, as to, i feel, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96263736264 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.684571977 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586813186813 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7865674987 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8461538462 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0764843204187 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0225814057499 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264172065545 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0434577414318 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268664025969 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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