TPO 49 - The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Friendship is the most important possession person can have. In other words, having a true friend makes our lives easier and full of happiness. although some people argue that old friends an integral part of happiness, I believe that making new friends ability is an essential part of happiness. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.
To begin with, making new friends can help people’s psychological health. it is especially in a scenario when staying in a strange environment. For example, these days, most university students are studying out of their hometowns, with little knowledge about the new environment and people around them. if students can make friends readily, they will reduce their sense of anxiety and keep their minds healthy. On the other hand, if these students have less ability to new friends, they will have difficulty adapting to this new environment. Eventually, this situation, could feel discouraged to students in university life and even affects their academic performance. As a result, making new friends is the most important component of a person's mental health.
Furthermore, meeting a new friend is also more beneficial for a career. Today, most people can find a job with social networks, which have a wide business circle. if you have many acquaintances, you are more likely to find a job. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, the company I worked for decided to lay off a large number of workers, citing a decrease in sales due to the Covid-19 pandemic. I was one of these people, and I felt so frustrated because it was totally unexpected about this situation. I searched for a job for 6 months, but no one, including my close friends, could help. Afterward, a friend I met in a job interview called, she was open for a new position in their company and asked me to apply immediately. although I didn't know her very well, she helped me with found a new jobConsequently, new friends are always the best opportunity for a personal career.
In conclusion, new make friends ability is more important for our mental health and personal career and thus it is a key role for our happiness. Therefore, if we want to lead a happy life, we must have many more friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86889460154 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82454362137 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542416452442 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9143642184 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0909090909 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6818181818 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86363636364 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283204990102 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822121602592 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622268969152 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18815195535 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312410120418 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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