TPO 03 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends

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TPO 03: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.

most people agree that friendships are important relationships throughout a person’s life span. While some people think that an old friend is the best choice, others disagree with this notion. personally, I believe that it is more important to make new friends than it is to keep old friends. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I explore in the following essay.

To begin with, The first important point that makes me hold this belief is that making a new friend can help people’s mental health. Especially, if you are living in a different city or going to a different school, your old friends always may not be with you. For example, these days, most university students are studying out of their hometowns, with little knowledge about the new environment. if students can make friends readily, they will reduce their sense of anxiety and keep their minds healthy. On the other hand, if these students have less ability to make new friends, they will have difficulty adapting to this new environment. eventually, this situation, could feel discouraged to students in university life and even affects their academic performance. As a result, making new friends is the most important component of a person's mental health.

Furthermore, the second rationale why I advocate this point of view is that meeting a new friend is the best way to a new perspective in life. meeting new friends always allows us to learn new things within our life. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I first moved to Istanbul, I didn’t have a car. my colleague from my company suggested I buy a bike and said we could ride together to work if I wanted. Moreover, we would ride bicycles to work at least 3 days a week and sometimes would ride bicycles in the local neighborhoods to go shopping on the weekends. I can say that I learned everything about cycling from her. Now she is my good friend to whom I share my problems and she helps me to find solutions. Additionally, thanks to her I feel very healthy and I never feel alone. it is clear to see that making a new friend is a key role in social lives.

In conclusion, I do believe that new friend always keeps our mental health and it improves our perspective. this is because these people will eventually lead to a reduction in our stress and an increase in our overall knowledge.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, while, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70531400966 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72784355883 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524154589372 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8664875258 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.6956521739 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47826086957 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350903303245 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986923552582 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105949062435 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210428398672 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102378868871 0.0645574589148 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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