Do you agree or disagree with the following sentence? In the past, Young people depended too much on their parents to make a decision for them; today young people are better able to make decision about their own life.
It is generally accepted that to make a decision is one of the crucial issues in society owing to it will effect on several parts of our life. Some people believe that young people always need their parents to help them in making decision; nevertheless, other people think that they improve their ability to make a decision lonely. However, it is very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages or their disadvantages. As matter of fact, it is important that we able to make a decision about all parts of our life because of a couple reasons.
In the beginning, one of the primary reasons is that by the advent of modern technologies, people can make lots of friends in various environments of their life, such as workplaces, university, and so on. They will able to get communication every day. This issue provides an apt ground for them to increase their knowledge by talking with their friend. For instance, when I was 18 years old, I wanted to go to university in another city where I could reach my goals. This decision not only was vital but also was essential for my future. Although I was worried about this matter, I talked to one of my friends who has a condition as same as me. Also, she explained the positive and negative aspects of this matter to support me. Hence, we will able to make a great decision by getting familiar with many people in our surrounding.
Second, the most persuasive point is that the time of reading books have increased between young people. Generally speaking, this matter assists them to growth their ideas about the significant matters of their life. In fact, if people utilize their knowledge that to reach by studying the different types of books, they could improve their skills on making decision. For example, before I wanted to get married with my husband that was one of the difficult decisions for every people, my information about marriage were improved by study a book named important issues related to marriage. Given this issue, studying is a good way to development their skill in own life.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that today young people extension their ability about making decision; therefore, nevertheless, there are many approach to improve people’s ability to make a decision, studying some book and having some friends are important factors in our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...cial issues in society owing to it will effect on several parts of our life. Some peop...
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Line 4, column 177, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun approach seems to be countable; consider using: 'many approaches'.
Suggestion: many approaches
...ion; therefore, nevertheless, there are many approach to improve people's ability to mak...
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Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ends are important factors in our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82168674699 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62324988836 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50843373494 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5466194184 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.166666667 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394065597511 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124328178854 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897302211524 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266652175842 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768512444834 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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