Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The most important and appreciated relation in the world is the one between parents and their children. Parents have to spend too much time with their children despite their degree of business. There is a debate about whether spending time with children playing together or helping them doing their homework. For me, I prefer to spend my free time having fun and playing games with my children. In this essay I will discuss my reason for that preference.

First of all, the quality of the time is more essential than its quantity. For very busy parents, spending this short period of time with the child doing hard tasks will give him bad impression about his relationship with his parents. He will hate meeting his parents instead of being cheerful with it. On the other hand, when the child shares his parents in funny activities like drawing, painting, playing video games or even walking in parks, he will be definitely more satisfied. From my personal experience, my parents are both physicians and when i was young, they were always busy in the hospital, so i was happier when they come home and play with me.

Secondly, the schoolwork can be done with the help of any teacher while the feelings of compassion, love and caring will only be given by the parents. The child does not wait from his parents to solve a mathematical question to him. Psychological studies showed that the presence of parents beside their children and showing them love allows them to grow up mentally and psychologically straight. They become normal and compassionate persons while the disturbed relations between parents and children results in abnormal and aggressive ones.

In the summary, spending little time with children doing activities they love is integral for the kids more than helping them in their school tasks. This is because parents do not have to be teachers, they have to practise their role as mom and dad.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...ildren playing together or helping them doing their homework. For me, I prefer to spe...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...discuss my reason for that preference. First of all, the quality of the time is...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... very busy parents, spending this short period of time with the child doing hard tasks will gi...
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Line 3, column 554, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...my parents are both physicians and when i was young, they were always busy in the...
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Line 3, column 609, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ey were always busy in the hospital, so i was happier when they come home and pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, secondly, so, while, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90461538462 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5196524603 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547692307692 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7495577806 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.625 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1875 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319677834777 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115682739699 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904715701899 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212635563097 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106154771906 0.0645574589148 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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