Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinion of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to young people than they are to older people.
It is generally accepted that we need to communicate with all types of people such as young and old people because this issue helps us for improving our knowledge in different and critical matters. However, some people believe that celebrities always tend to work with young people. On the other hand, other people do not think so. It is very difficult for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantage. As a matter of fact, I think that several people, who are famous individuals like entertainers and athletes, be able to detect several positive characters among young people because of a couple of reasons.
In the beginning, one of the primary reasons is that young people are a great source of energy that will capable of doing many considerable tasks during the day. In fact, they are an inseparable part of our society. Particularly, known people think that young people can provide an appropriate ground for their progression at work. For example, must of coaches, who are well-known people in all kind of sports, believe that young athletes have not only impetus but also power to do their activities. Although their experiences are not sufficient in a specific sport, they like devoting many parts of their life for reaching the experience of success at sport. Given this issue, the must of coaches will able to progress in their work by accessing their students to a great level related to some sports.
Second, the most persuasive point is that some celebrities tend to work with people who have a great them of creativity. To be frank, this character is a significant attribute of young people. Furthermore, it is supported by celebrities because they can expand their ideas about several new subjects. For example, some filmmakers, who always work with some new actors or actress that they like getting famous in cinema, believe that the new situation in sense can be created by the creativity of young people. In fact, their skills in the different condition can be utilized by some filmmakers. Besides, nevertheless, the ability of some great young people is not also essential but also vital; the knowledge of filmmakers in selecting correct people in different condition is necessary; therefore, young people are a great example of creativity.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the creative and energy are two notable factors for young people that provide a great condition to create interest among celebrities in other to work with them. Generally speaking, if some celebrities have two options to select young and old people, they obviously will prefer to choose young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in fact, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02237136465 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69640750552 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463087248322 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4397788859 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.157894737 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5263157895 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20754743565 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744400968786 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477208963959 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144285528771 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399986266136 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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