Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities
Education has attracted a great deal of attention in many societies because there is a direct connection between the number of educated people and the successfulness of a country. However, some controversies existed in the selected methods in this issue. Some people believe that government should pay more attention to the education of students at school rather that at universities, however, others disagree. From my own perspective, young children’s education has a more profound impact on the development of a country because of two main reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First of all, children learn not only more effectively but also more quickly than adults. In other words, teaching a certain amount of material to a child needs less energy and time compared to that for an adult. Therefore, it is logical to pay more attention to the young students if we want to achieve better results with lower efforts. To illustrate this point, the Japan government conducted a pilot research project years ago to investigate the connection between the age and learning efficiency. The results were interesting; they found that a student between the ages of 4 to 6 learns two times faster than a student over the age of 14. After this investigation, they tried to concentrated both their money and focus on the children’s education. Consequently, in the following years, Japanese society achieved substantial developments in different aspects such as economy, technology and etc.
Secondly, some skills are pretty impossible to be learned over the age of 18. Most of the scientists have done myriad studies in this field and found that the structure of human’s body and brain faces some limitation as their age increase. As a case in point, the ability to learn to speak a foreign language like a native is inextricably intertwined with the age of learner. In other words, the more one grows older, the less likely one will become to develop such skills. Furthermore, some sports like gymnastic is strongly depended of the age of learners. For example, I had gone to gym when I was a 5 year old boy and now I have gain a lot of medals in different international competitions. On the other hand, my brother tried even harder than me to obtain a half of my achievements but he couldn’t. That’s just because of his age, he started gymnastic at the age of 18, therefore, all his bone and body structure were too firm to be suitable for this kinds of sport. In this way, it is more acceptable and more economical to learn these types of ability at lower ages because it will be impossible from a specific age.
In brief, above from the aforementioned explanation, I do believe that governments should pay more attention and money to the education of younger students. This is because of the low amount of effort which is required and also the possibility of some activities which are reachable at lower ages. However, I suggest more surveys and studies be conducted to enable us to answer this question more precisely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in brief, such as, first of all, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97470817121 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00504818845 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519455252918 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6894651871 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.173913043 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.347826087 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.39130434783 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224222747116 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062149669747 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595807213491 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148952304352 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578819986435 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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