Some people think that making new friends bring more happiness, while others believe that maintaining old friends can make us happier. which one do you agree?
Friendship is of great importance because of its effect on the people's happiness. Some people may think that saving old friend for a long time can bring us more happiness, however, I personally do believe that making a new friend is more influential. Two main reasons are elaborated in the following paragraphs to prove this point of view.
First of all, new friends increase the likelihood of being highly motivated due to its diversity. In fact, as we become familiar with a new person, we try to explore in his both character and point of views toward life. Therefore, we may find numerous interesting things by which we can have more fun in our personal life led to more feeling of happiness. My life illustrates this point clearly. I have lived in New York for more than 10 years and made a few number of friends usually related to my university and job. In the last year of living there, I have met a girl in a nightclub who was totally far from my old friends in thought and way of living. Spending some time with her, I realized that how interesting life can be if I change my previous lifestyle. In this regard, that new person boosts my motivation by providing some simple but completely diverse points of living.
Secondly, only by having new friends can we easily gain new experience that may result in finding compelling strategies to deal with our current issues. In other words, our old friends convey considerable ideas and experiences during the early years, therefore, they have nothing unique to present in the following years. However, a new person has a different way of life that may enlarge our vision in which we will finally feel more delighted. My brother has a real experience in this field. He failed in all the businesses that he had started during his life. Due to his fixed friends, he was a close-mind man, consequently, he tried similar things in his new businesses but the final results were almost identical, which was a failure. Once he met a person in his apartment, and they became intimate friends after spending just a few weeks. Because of the new experiences that his new friend had, they started a new business, it was a huge success for both of them. Now, my brother feels absolutely delighted because he becomes finally successful in a business and that is commonly referred to his new friend.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanations, I do believe that new friends can make us happier in compare to maintaining the old ones. In this way, we should try to broaden our mind by finding new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...importance because of its effect on the peoples happiness. Some people may think that s...
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Line 3, column 456, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
... York for more than 10 years and made a few number of friends usually related to my univer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, in fact, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69710467706 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68925770122 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518930957684 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9781038628 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8636363636 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4090909091 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317381653637 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945892838924 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123292384385 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251130188176 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111502300317 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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