If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
A great deal of attention has been attracted to how we should manage our budget because of its profound effect on individual's life. Even though some ways of decreasing the cost of living are mentiond, I personally subscibe to the theory that the most logical way is to find a roomate. To substantiate this viewpoint, two main reasons are elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, as we share a house with another person, we exactly save a have a half of our rental cost. In fact, the most espensive things that contemporay people are face to, is rental cost and if we find a roomate, this cost will be divide equally. My life story illustrates this point clearly. When I was a university student in Sydney, I could not use an on-campus housing, therefore I rented a house near to the university which usually costs more expensive than far areas. In this way, I had to pay around 2000 dollars each month which was a catastrophe for an undergraduate students. Once I found a roomate to share my house, I could easily save 1000 dollars a month. Therefore, my life quality was extremly increased and I could have more fun with that extra money. It is worth mentioning that I had saved money in other way during living alone such as not buying computer laptop or changing my old cell phone but they just helped me at last 1000 to 3000 dollars in a year. However, my rental cost play a prominent role in managing my budget.
Secondly, only by sharing a house could the secondary cost of livig such as bills, furnitures, Tv, and so on be saved efficiently. In other words, house price is just of side of the story, the other side of our expanses is closely associated with the devices that we have in our houses. Therefore, share a house can increase the likelihood of saveing more money in other ways, too. For instance, as I mentioned my life strory in Sydney, an expensive city in Australia, I was able to control other sides of my budget. I can remeber that we had bought TV, CD player, carpet, refrigrator and other things by dividing its cost. How happy I was at those time that I could save money in this way, too. Apart from it, I could eat better than that I could do before, this is just because we were responsible for each meal seperately and also buying ingrediencts is whole sale was coicide with using some discounts. In this way, both my and my friends life changed in to a better quality.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanations, I do believe that sharing a room with a person is the most effective way that we could save money. This is just because of the rental cost and secondary cost of living that will be reduced to a considerable extent. That's why we should be aware of the importance of having a roomate in this costly society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5119047619 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58958597663 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498015873016 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3801769119 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8695652174 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91304347826 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105253180201 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032124350678 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284516127641 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713593714271 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0128945555439 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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