If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
Money management is a valuable skill which helps people. In this hectic life that we should pay for anyting even for air we breath, we should learn how to develop such a great saving practices. from the given option to help a friend being financial savvy in their life, I strongly recommend them to share their living space to reach this goal as much as they can. In the following essay, I will delve inot my perspective.
First, the house rent is almost the biggest part of our living cost. Between fifty and seventy percent of individuals' income who do not have their own home throw out for rent. Any small saving in this humingous part of living expenses ends up saving a lot. To put it into perspective, when I was studing chemistry in Boston University, I rent a room in an apartment neer my campus. It cost me a thousand dollar per month. After a few months, my saving was shrinking and I went to a tight budget. My father gave me a wise advice and told me to pick a roommate. He explained his experience when he was abroad and worked as an engineer with some of his peers in a flat in England. I applied his recomendation, post an ad in our university website about finding a roommate. From the first month after sharing my room, I could cut my cost to half. It was a big remedy, which provide me a chance to spend for my other needs like going to movie and concert which I enjoyed a lot.
Second, there are several other savings when a person choose a roommate to share room. Ohter living cost such as: mountly payment for the Internet, power and gas bills, even some kitchen utensile. Again about my college experience, in the sophomore year, my friends and I decided to move to a new plalce, which was bigger and closer to campus building. Even the whole rent price was bigger than one we had, sharing the new large apartment with two new friends made that more affordabel for us. From the begining, we split the cost of hot and heat, in addition, we bought some kitchen utensile with the common budget whcih we consider as a surcharge on our rent. As time passed, this sharing program showed its more benefits. Gradully, we became close friend who not onty shared our living space but helped each other in lessons and research projects as well. Had we not shared our apartment, we would not have survived paying that expenxive rent and finding these helpful friends.
All in all, I strongy recomment my friends to share their living palces to decrease their cost. This sharing program cut the living cost since it splits the biggest part of expenses. Moreover, with this plan there is a chance to decrease some other cost like the home Internet, power and gas bills and maybe transportation. Having a chance to share experience and knowledge is another boon of this plan.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, even so, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53663366337 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.392329998 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534653465347 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5980455992 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8518518519 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7037037037 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125617683733 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370268727835 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278047791557 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797767341522 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220627403389 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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