If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
Living expenses, a significant element in one’s personal life, have been valued and even triggered heated discussions over how to reduce them. In order to decrease daily spending, a person, in some people’s views, can find a roommate to share rental or purchase fewer technology products. Contrary to these people’s views is my perspective that a person should buy less expensive food and choose to cook at home.
What must be prioritized is that by making purchase of cheap food, rather than buying new technological devices less often, people can reduce their living expenses, through cultivating the habit of thrift and getting discounts. Initially, it is the purchase of less expensive ingredients that enhances the awareness of saving money in consumption. To be more specific, when getting accustomed to buying cheap food, people are likely to be cautious about their spending and endeavor to reduce expenses in every aspect of life, such as clothing, transportation and entertainment; on the other hand, the habit of saving in life cannot be fostered when they only decrease the frequency of buying technologyndevices. Moreover, with cheap products bought, people will enjoy more discounts. Specifically, never can we ignore that cheap food, almost expired and preferred by fewer people, will be in discount, making it possible for them to keep their budget tight; however, maintaining the original prices, due to the popularity among numerous customers, devices can be unaffordable and cannot lower their expenses.
What should be equally worth discussing is that cooking at home instead of finding a roommate to share rental, people can reduce expenses effectively, including those in service and diseases. To begin with, only by having meals at home can people eliminate spending on service. Specifically, when cooking and eating at home, not only can people save tips to waiters, but also they can avoid the payment for chefs, which can effectively decrease expenses; in contrast, the expenses on service, in the form of others' assistance, cannot be overlooked when a person lives with a roommate. Moreover, the more frequently people have meals at home, the less likely they will get sick, reducing medical expenses. To explain it further, it is healthy for people to cook at home, where they can choose a balanced diet, clean ingredients thoroughly and add less oil, contributing to a wholesome lifestyle and thus decreasing life expenses; however, they will imitate the unhealthy eating habits of people around, get susceptible to sickness and spend much on health care if living with roommates.
In conclusion, living expenses, a significant element in people's life, can be effectively cut down if we shop for less expensive food and cook at home, due to the positive impact on thrift and healthy habit.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27876106195 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86388485784 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513274336283 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.354168741 48.9658058833 205% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.428571429 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2857142857 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188140427463 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080513881272 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491353132963 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12832714127 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439465586424 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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