Considering the word advertisement, it provokes many concepts among different people. Some might consider it a positive tool in the fate of a country, while others may think of it unquestionably a reason of conflict. As far as I am concerned, I adopt a firm position which will support the statement that commercials are absolutely a reflection of a country. There are many reasons for this perspective but I will discuss only the primary ones here.
First of all, television commercial plays a significant role to portray our culture and traditional vibrances. Some advertisements show people’s ideology ,their way of communication, habits and what is valuable to them. I would like to illustrate my point with a vivid example. Recently, a renowned jewellery company in my country named “Tanishq” is broadcasting their commercial where a woman adorned with gorgeous attire and resplendent jewellery is making design with colourful sands on the floor. On the other side, her children are bursting crackers and they are saying, ‘ make this” Diwali” more beautiful with Tanishq’. This commercial gives a massage that during the festival of diwali , people burst crackers and make designs with colourful sands. This example solidifies the dominance of my view that advertising is undeniably a strong tool of conveying cultural values.
Secondly, there is another factor which deserves few words. The advertising helps understand the development of a country. Certainly, there are many private channels in a country, which are owned by some wealthy people and can be very advanced in technicalities, but the national channels utilize the state fund and best represent the true picture of country's progress. For instance, several years beck, television commercials in my country used to be very old fashioned, in terms of graphics, editing, and even the settings for a commercial. However, in few years, there has been a progressive inclination of youth towards media education. This has made a noticeable difference in the field of telecommunication and it has become much more advanced now. When today, I compare channels of some developed countries with that of mine, I do not find much difference. Presumably, this has been possible just because of the advent of the technology, and the best representation to portray this development is the television commercials. This example clearly solidifies the dominance of my opinion that advertising play an important role in representing a country's growth.
By way of conclusion, based on the ideas explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases, advertisement may seem insignificant to some people but it serves as a key stone in telecommunication. Not only does it reflect a country's traditional values but it also educates the world at large. For these reasons, I strongly support the statement that commercials really tell about a country. Therefore, in my opinion, a person should value the importance of advertisement for the betterment of his country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35390946502 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28698114905 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549382716049 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9406687981 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.08 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.44 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138836181549 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389772079883 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431757768393 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861784842045 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213452658224 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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