Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel. It's better than attending university straight away.
Without a shadow of doubt, education plays a prominent role in every individual's life. Moreover, students are encountered with dozens of plans for continuing their educational life after high school graduations. The controversial question which arises here is whether having a brief experience of work or travel before going to university is a suitable choice or not. As far as I am concerned, it is better to experience a one-year work or travel before attending the university. There are several noticeable reasons, two of which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the reason why it is a prudent course of action to have an experience before going to college lies in the fact that students usually are not familiar with various fields of studies as adequate as they can decide for their future. In other words, the information that students get in high school is too general to recognize their actual field of interest. As a result, a short experience of work off-campus can be considered a help for their decision about their fields of study, which is a significant part of their lives because they have to spend a lot of time on their future work. For instance, four years ago, when I graduated in high school, I worked in a company that does massive mechanical engineering projects to which the major I thought I was attracted. Consequently, I broaden my awareness about that field and I choose mechanical engineering with more open eyes.
Another equally noteworthy reason that deserves some words here is that people can communicate with a broad spectrum of people coming from different classes of their society in a short experience of a journey or work. As a result, they can improve their interpersonal skills or shed their fear of speaking with new persons. Moreover, they can improve their self-confidence and ensure that they will have fewer difficulties to triumph in communicating with their colleagues. For example, a recent study I read shows that the students who attend cooperative activities like camping and traveling have much fewer troubles in socializing in the university environment.
In summary, all of the aforementioned ideas lead us to the conclusion that it is a suitable choice to interrupt your educational process with a one-year journey or work experience. It is highly recommended that the government constitutes some organizations to plan some programs for students to attend and gain mentioned benefits form them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in summary, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12776412776 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01203649608 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538083538084 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2778417082 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.4375 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219638360146 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077733560849 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530473318112 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144963312887 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515578751614 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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