Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All jobs should provide some opportunity for physical exercise. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Physical exercise is more important nowadays than it was in the past, especially with most of jobs done by humans today are sedentary office work. In my opinion, I believe that each company should provide opportunity for physical exercise for its employees. I feel this way for many reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, exercise is very beneficial for the human body. Working out will help workers to be more productive. Most employees today consume energy beverages either to keep up with the workload or to even be more efficient and competitive than their colleagues. Unfortunately, some kinds of those drinks are extremely harmful to many organs such as the liver. Plus, they contain a huge amount of sugar which is not healthy. Therefore, companies are required to encourage their team members to avoid this detrimental habit. One solution to this contemporary hazard is to have a gym on-site. Exercising and stretching almost have the same motivational effect as energy drinks, but exercise, on the other hand, does not cause tremendous damage to body organs like stimulant beverages. employees who work out will have adequate blood supply to the brain, which will allow them to focus on the tasks assigned to them and to be more energetic. Thus, a treadmill or other office workout equipment will benefit the employee, the company and will ensure a positive work environment.
Secondly, a sedentary lifestyle will be highly deleterious to the business and to the staff. Desk-bound people badly need to stretch or exercise at least on their breaks. Otherwise, they could suffer negative consequences on their health and career. they will be more prone to stress, depression and other mental illnesses, in addition to physical cost. Hence, a stress ball or a stretching equipment on-site will definitely help those individuals. The employer is no exception from this fallout. An office work environment without a spot to have some relief from work pressure could pose a serious issue. employees will be mostly overwhelmed and as a result, they will be less productive and will not give their best to what they are doing. However, a simple accommodation to let people exercise will cure this problem.
In conclusion, people who have a chance to work out during business hours will be happier and will contribute more to the success of their enterprise. Nonetheless, a company that do not bother to make a comfortable atmosphere for its labor will be hit by unwanted outcomes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, at least, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09638554217 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78036580781 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563855421687 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7139609761 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.125 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0849673622754 0.236089414692 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273290352257 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460512182935 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759201498095 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806365456892 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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