Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As the modern life is more convenient and compact, I think it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. While some may feel like it is supposed to help teens to get through everyday with little efforts, I hold the opinion that somehow the fast-pacing life could detour us, even in ways we do not realize. Thus, it's of great importance for young people to equip themselves with superb planning and organizing ability.
Firstly, if young people do not plan and organize, it would be easy for them to fool around. As modern life may provide us with more convenience, like internet and wi-fi, there are higher chances for people to waste time on the internet. This could be observed from most teenagers nowadays. People used to spend their summer vacation out traveling or swimming, exercising. In contrast, most of them now just prefer to stay in and get online to watch some videos or TV programs. If one doesn't have proper control over those electronic devise, they would just help us do nothing as we have the chance to improve ourselves. This is when the ability of planning and organizing comes to present its significance in youngsters' lives.
Also, when one do not plan and organize, it's easier to get loose and drawn in tasks. It is believed that with the bloom of technology, people tend to multi-task during their work hours. For example, an assistant may be typing in the data on his computer while listening to some music, or even simultaneously check out the schedule for his boss. With the use of technology, though it may be really convenient for youngsters to have their hands full working in order to save time. The result may not be fruitful. Since the efficiency does not mean effecacy, people may just finish their work but never "refine" it. Unlike these kind of people, those ones who carefully plan and organize their time management may have higher evaluation from their colleges and boss. Because they always prioritize their tasks, they can always accomplish their work loadings with the shortest time.
In conclusion, I strongly stand with the idea that young people should have the ability to plan and organize due to the complex modern life. Without this kind of ability, the youngsters may be inclined to electronic devices and waste their time, as well as fail to refine bunches of tasks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...s supposed to help teens to get through everyday with little efforts, I hold the opinion...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...atch some videos or TV programs. If one doesnt have proper control over those electron...
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Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...but never 'refine' it. Unlike these kind of people, those ones who carefully pla...
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Line 5, column 653, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'those' instead.
Suggestion: those
...' it. Unlike these kind of people, those ones who carefully plan and organize their t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, so, thus, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8275862069 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5535826391 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519704433498 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6192769734 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261886290635 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888616826714 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090628286 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193221188644 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056313304602 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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