Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For hundreds of years people have never stopped debating about whether classmates are more significant impact than parents on a child’s success in the school or not. Although it seems plausible at first glimpse that parents have a considerable effect on their child’s success in the school, I would counter this point of view due to some reasons. I will enlarge on what I mean in this essay.
Above all, usually, there are competitions among children in classes, in stark contrast, children never compete with their parents. In other words, children’s classmates are noticeable motivation for them to study their lessons well. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. My classmates and I were real rival in lessons for each other, and we all desperately wanted to get the best grade in each lesson, but this competition was only about lessons, not in other aspect of being rival. Therefore, they were the best motivation for me and I always tried to do my best in exams.
The other reason which deserves some words is that due to the development of science, teachers often use new methods to teach students which parents are not familiar with those ways. To clarify this point, classmates are the best private teacher for each other since they are studying the same things simultaneously, so they can see a subject from dissimilar point of view. As a result, they can help each other very well. Take my high school, for example. Although we had a competition about our lessons, we helped each other in distinctive ways. I sometimes had problems with mathematic and my friend, Ali usually helped me to solve those troubles. However, my parents could not explain them to me in an efficient way since they solved them with old methods which were too tough to me.
Another subtle point which I should deem lies on the fact that parents are not in the classrooms, so they have no impact on the atmosphere of that, while classmate can help each other to make a relaxing atmosphere for themselves and even for their teacher which can lead to prosperity for all of them. Hence, classmates are more noteworthy effect than parents on a child’s success in the class and likewise in the school.
To sum up, given the facts that classmates can be a good motivation for children, they help each other in distinctive ways since they have lots of things in common, I am of the opinion that they have more influence on the goal achievement of the children in the schools.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...my parents could not explain them to me in an efficient way since they solved them with old methods...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, likewise, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i mean, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75342465753 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60806552762 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495433789954 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.338112148 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14535987237 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564947925471 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697507604386 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963999270423 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505311603803 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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