Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school.
• It has been disputing for long time which has more important influence classmates or parents. It leads us to wonder which one is more prominence. I hold the belief that classmates play an essential role than parents.
• To begin with, the moderate competing with associates hugely stimulate child’s ambition. For example, when I was in 7th grade, I didn’t do well in math in the beginning, as I thought all those formulas really intricate for me. In addition, I always scored low compared with my peers, and so further I felt very stressful. However, under such peer pressure, my score gradually increased, because I studied harder and tried to surpass my friends. This moderate competition actually helped me make much progress in my math. At the end, I graduated by best math grade in my class. From this experience, I really think that moderate competition can bring positive impact on a child’s success at school.
• The cooperating with friends would induce new ideas we never though before. Sometime teachers assigned so difficult homework that a student can’t figure out by one’s own. Yet two heads are better than one. If children work with friends, then it would take less time to complete the homework. To illustrate, when I was a 5th grade, immense homework such as math and science bombarded me. Although the questions of every subject were a few, they are extremely abstract and intricate. Spending more than 20 hours for a homework does not guarantee students to dig up a feasible approach. In order to deal with the assignments, my classmates and I teamwork to brainstorm. In my experience, although no one is capable to offer a workable answer, everyone would provide some partial results. By combining all the partial results, usually the solution would appear.
• In conclusion, I think classmates have more influence on child’s success in school. Not only because moderate competition with classmates bring positive impact but because they can work together.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, really, so, then, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12386706949 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86159021057 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61329305136 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8845682208 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.0909090909 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0454545455 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241816312702 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685573051609 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084611028531 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164434630204 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639828498994 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.82 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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