Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships. Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.
Competition, a way to measure who will the better one, is now being controversially debated about whether it will have a negative effect on friendship when friends are competing with each other. Personally, I am highly convinced that competition will be a barrier in terms the influence it has on friendship.
Primarily, the disagreement between each other will make the friendship unlikely to be maintained. When competing with each other, conflicts are likely to happen as the result of the fact that a competition will end up being a winner and a loser. The one who wins will be gradually look down on the loser, while the one who fail to win the game will envy the winner. In this case, there will be a tendency that even if the friendship still exists, they won’t see eye to eye to each other. Also, this sort of relationship is so dangerous that it can be broken up at any time because there is disagreement on both sides of the relationship. It is plausible that the breaking of the relationship will be easily triggered and when that happens the situation will be more dramatic owing to a longer pent-up process. It turns out that friendship can be hardly remained when friends are competing with one another.
Apart from that, competitors may use some inappropriate methods to fulfill their goals. Contestants tend to do everything to make it possible to achieve their goals when they have their targets in mind. Under such circumstance, even though they realize that they are competing with their friends and are not supposed to do those things which are not regarded to be fair in a competition, they will still do those bad things due to the fact that, as for them, friendship pales in comparison of interests. When their friends as competitors are aware of the negative behaviors done by his or her friends, they will definitely abandon this sort of friendship in which his or her friends can just disregard the existing friendship.
In brief, I believe that friendship cannot be maintained due to the facts that when competing, there will be disagreement coming up and negative behavior tends to be done by one of the members in the friendship when having competitions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, so, still, while, apart from, as for, in brief, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83554376658 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85766642806 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488063660477 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.2896071864 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.214285714 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9285714286 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0739282286072 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0333267425262 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0259314544086 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0523312257411 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264546736209 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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