Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to success at college or university?
1. Tutors in university.
2. The encouragement from family and friends.
3. High-quality education from high school.
Universities, a platform towards more opportunities, have been considered to be a significant component of students’ success. Many factors can make students successful in the universities, such as tutoring, getting encouragement from parents and high-quality education from high school. All of them seem to be plausible to the success in universities. However, I am convinced that the most vital factor is high-quality education from high school.
Admittedly, the other two factors do have some advantages. Primarily, tutoring in university can help students make improvement in their known knowledge as well as have a better understanding of their study. When students are teaching others, they may be asked some questions that they have never think about. Then they will try to work it out after coming home. Students will therefore definitely have a stronger consolidation of their study. On top of that, after being given enough encouragement by parents, students will be more motivated in their lives. Since students who are relatively young, they need encouragement from others. And this kind of help will be only gained from people who do care about them like parents and friends. As a result, help of parents and friends which can make them hold a positive world view is now of vast importance.
Despite these, I do believe that more advantages can be found in a good education in high school. To start, students can gain considerable abilities to support their study and lives in the universities. A superior high school’s priority is to make sure students’ study. So they needn’t spend much time getting solutions to high-level questions. Moreover, high-quality education provided by high school is sure to include education on teaching students how to prevent making mistakes in campus life. In a new, unknown circumstance, there are going to be a number of problems. With high-quality education as said, students may make adaptation quickly without many problems. Last but not least, high school education is also important to form their methods of study. A good high school education will be more likely to spare enough time for students to self-study. In this case, these students may form their own methods and systems which are distinctly helpful during their study in universities.
All in all, all the three may include some benefits, while I do believe that a high-level high school education may be more advantageous. Consequently, I would give students a piece of suggestion that they should pay more attention to choose high schools because a subtle problem in high schools may more immensely affect their lives than a problem in universities does.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27378190255 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05702218849 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503480278422 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4011666489 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.92 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.24 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360874766661 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110578391199 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1009511201 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23914277703 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094039600928 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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