Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to success at college or university?
1. Tutors in university
2. The encouragement from family and friends
3. High-quality education from high school
One of the most important goals of pupils who enter college or university is being successful in their life, however may have a diverse definition of success in their life, it seems that graduating with a wonderful states of knowledge and being able to find a well-payed job in their majors can be a key of success. While some people believe that having a supporting family or a solid scientific background could guarantee a student success, I personally think that the role of tutors in this process is so much important. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my reasons.
To begin with, tutors know the route of success very well and they are able to show and teach this trajectory to students. Based on their knowledge and experiences they deal with diverse factors which could give students help to prepare themselves to attempting in the right way to achieve success. By way of example, when I studied pharmacy at the university one of my tutors how teach us the industrial pharmacy helped many of students who were eager to work in a high-pace companies to reach the highest rank of promotion. He not only was a wonderful teacher who convey the educational material in the best way, but he depicted the best practical way of success for students as well. He introduced those pupils to different pharmaceutical companies as an intern and follow their projects to teach them anything needed to be an expert in that field. I remember all of them landed an excellent job straight forwardly after graduation and now all of them are highly successful in their lives.
Secondly, tutors at the university armed themselves with knowledge and abilities which they need to be able to help students to succeed. Nowadays, university tutors are more eager to nurture students in a way that they achieve their goals as soon as possible. In this competitive realm of education, colleges are able to absorb students which they have plan for students' success. Those universities hire tutors who they know how lead students to success. Hence, tutors armed themselves with many skills and abilities to help pupils in this way. For instance, my brother who works as a senior tutor in Boston community college should participate in diverse course of continuous education to keep himself up-to-date with these materials. He said to me that every semester they learned a new technique in these issues such as time management, efficient programing, team working, and critical thinking. He claimed that they teach these skills to students and in the past five years that teachers have had those workshops, the rate of students’ success in classes and finding job after graduation increased dramatically.
In sum, I firmly believe that tutors are the most important factor in students’ success. This is because they have the knowledge and experience to teach student how walk in this way and because they have a excellent network in the real world to help student to succeed in jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2476.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93227091633 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72530054477 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480079681275 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.3847773006 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.315789474 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243205664542 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859885446618 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616702799332 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155769564576 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244592402032 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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