Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Dancing plays an important role in a culture Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Dancing plays an important role in a culture. Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer

I totally disagree that dancing is very important in a culture. However, I do agree that music plays the role in a culture.
Firstly, music shows the culture's wealthy. For example, I live in Brazil where people only listen to punk, pagode and forró. These style of music are very poor because they are very easy to play. Furthermore, any musician is able to hear them and write down note by note with easy. However, hard rock and heavy metal styles are much more difficult to play due to the fact that they require sophisticated harmony and melody. Those styles come mainly from U.S and England. Therefore, U.S and England have a more wealthy culture than Brazil.
Secondly, dancing does not tell anything about culture. It is all a matter of bodies' performance. A person only needs to learn some moviments in order to dance with others. As a matter of fact, dancing is a way of entertainment and socialize with others.
Finally, music tells the history of a country and shows how good is its culture.

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Average: 5.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...melody. Those styles come mainly from U.S and England. Therefore, U.S and England...
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...inly from U.S and England. Therefore, U.S and England have a more wealthy culture...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 829.0 1977.66487455 42% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 177.0 407.700716846 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68361581921 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4498154962 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 212.727598566 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649717514124 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 618.680645161 44% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.274367097 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.2142857143 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.6428571429 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181850496215 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651315160863 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864860572674 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140583122629 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135510921896 0.0645574589148 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 86.8835125448 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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