Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today that it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web sites. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of human beings, education has played a significant role in people’s lives. No one can turn a blind eye to the enormous effect of education in our daily lives. There is a heated controversy as to whether educating children is more difficult today than it was in the past due to the fact that teenagers, nowadays, spend so much time on mobile phone, online games, and social networking websites, to name but three. In this regard, some people may hold this viewpoint that educating kids is not more difficult today than it was before. Nevertheless, some others take an opposite point of view and believe otherwise. I am firmly in favor of the latter point of view. There are quite a few reasons why I subscribe to this idea, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first has to do with the fact that time is the most invaluable gift of our life, and we must consider its value in each and every aspect of our life. Nowadays, as it commonly sensed, with the galloping rate at which science and technology are flourishing, electronic devices are becoming more and more attractive to children. Therefore, children expend most of their time on using such devices to spend their leisure time. Hence, they forget how much time they spend on these devices, since these electronic devices are very astonishing to them. Consequently, they lack time to educate, to practice, and to do their homework, to name but a handful.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that electronic devices have many functions by which students can solve their educational problems. For example, if a student has a math problem, he or she does not have any interest in thinking, inasmuch as they can use their computer so as to solve the problem for them. Hence, it is very difficult for parents to encourage their children to solve, for instance, the very problem in person. As Stephen Hawking says, and I am quoting, “Technology will take our power of thinking, and some day it will be against our innovation.”
In conclusion, an important issue over which we must ponder to grasp the essence of this piece of writing is that parents in general and teachers in particular should not take the importance of educating children for granted, and should strive to expand children’s knowledge, and encourage them to think.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ly lives. There is a heated controversy as to whether educating children is more difficult to...
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Line 5, column 300, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...inasmuch as they can use their computer so as to solve the problem for them. Hence, it i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86396181384 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81643541172 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532219570406 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3896407531 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.375 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239389426419 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073534596772 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837304691737 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126588558373 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080124405456 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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