Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of human beings, humans have been seeking for success to make their life more convenient, exciting, and delightful. No one can turn a blind eye to the complexity of the modern life, and its tremendous effect on people. In this regard, there is a heated controversy as to whether youth should have the ability to plan and organize or not. Some people may hold this viewpoint that it is essential for youth to have such abilities. Nevertheless, some others may take an opposite point of view and believe otherwise. I, for one, firmly believe that obtaining these abilities have many merits, which, without any shadow of doubts, outweigh its demerits. There are quite a few reasons why I subscribe to this idea, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first has to do with the fact that every person needs some motivation to proceed his or her life in a decent way. If a young person does not know how to manage and organize the different situations of their life, not only will he or she not be capable of doing their best in their tasks, but they also will become depressed. As Carl Gustave Jung--a celebrated Swiss psychologist--asserts in one of his remarkable works, and I am quoting, “Motivation is the most critical as well as essential factor in order to encourage people to do something.” This statement clarifies the fact that the more one is motivated, the more he or she lives a thriving and vibrant life.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance for which I have to elaborate is that if one wants to be more successful, they must brave each and every ups and downs in their hectic life. Nowadays, life is replete with a great deal of hustles and bustles, and, as a result of which, one needs to be more prepared to encounter the intricate, or complex decisions of their life. Therefore, all people in general and younger people in particular must know how to manipulate and solve many difficult problems of their daily life, in that youth are in the most significant epoch of their life. There is a renowned Persian proverb, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this, “If you want to be successful, you must think before any action you take,” which emphasizes the value of preparation in every decision made by a person.
In conclusion, by taking into account all the reasons mentioned above and many other ones, as far as I am concerned, younger people should not take the importance of planning and organizing for granted and should try to make the best of them. Hence, in my opinion, having such abilities as planning and organizing, are essential for younger people due to the complexity of modern life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...s regard, there is a heated controversy as to whether youth should have the ability to plan a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a decent way" with adverb for "decent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e motivation to proceed his or her life in a decent way. If a young person does not know how to...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...their life, not only will he or she not be capable of doing their best in their ta...
^^
Line 5, column 773, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...ou must think before any action you take,' which emphasizes the value of preparat...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in general, in particular, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76288659794 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7879506311 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513402061856 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.2435608226 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.375 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3125 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230224589085 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830915683248 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058900904436 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149266696192 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374310186865 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.