Some people think that the main purpose of schools is to teach children to become good citizens and workers, rather than benefiting them as individuals. Agree/ Disagree?
The mission of education of children is far from easy. Some people believe that at school, the inculcation of ethical lessons in children to become useful citizens is imperative, while others subscribe to the view that each individual should bring personal interests to the fore when studying at school. I partly/partially agree with the latter view for the following/ensuing reasons.
First, it is abundantly clear that the priority of education of the youngsters towards their needs is psychologically conducive to their learning. In effect, with no restriction, which entails them to follow moral codes of the society, they feel relaxed/at ease and study more effectively. Nevertheless/Nonetheless, Can a class achieve its high efficaciousness when each individual, because of putting his/her needs above others, for instance, goes to class late or forgets to do homework? The crux of the matter is that only in a disciplined environment which underscores their obedience to/compliance with the community code can they learn how to get along with others and become confident in their work environment in the future.
The second reason in support of/ in favor of individualism in education at school is to encourage/spur children to explore their inner desire. It is crystal clear that they discover what they truly desire in this life and may come up with revolutionary inventions to make a difference in the world, like the case of Thomas Edison. However, under no circumstances can such inventions gain/win wide support/recognition if they are only to serve the individual need of the creators and some minorities. The fact of the matter is that their success roots from/hails from/springs from/stems from the community purpose that is to enhance the quality of life for all. Another cogent argument is that if individualism were to be worshipped, for the sake of profit, youngsters could become businessmen stripped of ethics/moral compass leading to the prevalence of low-quality products and substandard services. On top of it all, when it comes to the solution to the global issues, say, environment, epidemics and political conflicts, can the individuals who only benefit themselves play a part?
All things considered, at the heart of education of any kind is the harmony/reconciliation between individual and community that needs to produce citizens who can follow the moral code to become useful citizens, and concurrently, pursue their own interest to add more color to the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Are you missing a verb?
... to the fore when studying at school. I partly/partially agree with the latter view for...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...xed/at ease and study more effectively. Nevertheless/Nonetheless, Can a class achieve its hi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35532994924 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.42668545496 2.67179642975 128% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560913705584 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2632659416 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.714285714 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106067387406 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363675608031 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040816609844 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734557100437 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578544402146 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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