New technologies brings much challenges to our life. High-tech fascilities such as mobile phones and computers have nemerous benfits for human life, but besides all the advantages, they have some potential danger for us especially young children. For example, some parents believe they should impose a limitation for their children's using time of these electric devices. They think it is necessary except the time children do their homework. As a father, I personally agree with this idea for some remarkable reason which will be explored in the following essay.
To begin with, young children do not possess the ability to schedule a thourough plan for themselves. They waste considerable amount of time sitting in front of computer screens or stiring to their mobile phones. Therefore the children not only kill their valuable time but also harm their eyes anf sane. This wasting time can be allocate to useful activities such as reading books and doing some exercises. Recently, I read an article stating that seventy percent of children who has obesity are the ones playing videogames far much than allowable time. In other words, these children do not have enough time to do other activities. I surely believe that parents can play significant role by supervising the time their children spend in front of these electric devices and block the occurence of further danger. The parents should allow their children use these devices for their homework and after that let them use these devices in a limited time.
Moreover, surely these devices are connected to the internet. Altough the internet has a lot of merits for children, there is no supervision on the internet contents. Thus, children are exposed to wide range of unappropriate information and websites that can have adverse effect on children. The more the children surfing the web, the more they are exposed to these potential danger. I believe that parents can reduce their children exposure time to these improper contents by exerting some rules that limit the usage time of the electirc devices. It worths to mention that it is parent's duty to teach their beloved children the true way of using internet content.
In conclusion, I think the best approach for parents who have young children is to first teach their childen how to use these devices properly and secondly limit the time that children allowed to use these devices. By adopting this approach not only they can use electric devices to their homeworks and playing games, but also they do not harm themselves at all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
New technologies brings much challenges to our life. High-tech fasci...
Line 2, column 213, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...eens or stiring to their mobile phones. Therefore the children not only kill their valuab...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05700712589 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52182488876 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498812351544 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5216251064 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.380952381 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291764357482 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996232387062 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636560893256 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206501641168 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060210229941 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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