Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

One of the most important part of one's life is family. We have many memories from our parents, grandparents or other families when we were child or had more time to be with each other. Personally, I am of the opinion that our extended family is as important as the past but the type of the relations has been changing because of some reasons that mentioned as follows.

First of all, people are now busier that the past, having not enough time to go to see other people in the family but it does not mean that they do not care of their family. For example, some years ago we missed our house because of unwanted fire and our family, even persons who I had not met more than two times during my life, called and try to help by coming to see us, renting money and helping to pass the strait. These are the exact behaviors that we expected in the past.

Second, most of the people had to change their city in order to find a decent job or to attend a prestigious university abroad. Therefore, they cannot go to see their family just like before. But now people use various ways to attain their relations and become aware of each other such as internet, social networks and calling. Not only they do not reduce the level of their socialization, but also they can talk to each other everywhere and every moment they want. For instance, I and my cousins and siblings have a group in Telegram, a social network application that brings about an opportunity to chat with each other and assist each other if needed. One time, my cousins had an important problem with one of his courses and ventilated his question in group. Surprisingly, after a minute the other member took an snapshot of a paper and shared it, having solved the problem and set down it on a paper.

In conclusion, family is not separable from us but the type of relationships has been changing from seeing each other to being aware of one another using other means of communications.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ehaviors that we expected in the past. Second, most of the people had to change...
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...y, after a minute the other member took an snapshot of a paper and shared it, havi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48595505618 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43227934877 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542134831461 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.0656120635 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.071428571 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104017085514 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408661049208 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345598237897 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0708619314824 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293605612554 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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