Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
At every turn of individual life, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of family in our life. Some people believe that extended family is more important now than it was in the past. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold de opposite view. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, having a big family you will be exposure to innovative ideas and it will help you to develop functional and helpful skills. In other words, a family with grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles have valuable experience in their lives. As a result, you can learn their live's ideias and concepts. Also, it can develop your self-confidence, because you can share your feelings and fears. Take my own experience as compelling example. When I was a child, I always spend my time at my grandfather's house. In this time, I learned valuable knowledges and virtues with my grandmother and grandfather. Hence, after a long time there, I developed my self-confidence and my personality. Therefore, the more time I spent in my grandfather's house, the more I was exposure to valuable experiences.
The second reason to coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, an extended family can relieve our personal worries and stress. To be more specific, nowadays is very important to have a family to solve our personal problems. Moreover, having a cousin or an uncle to share our personal problems might help people to have a rational approaches to provide an aid for achieve their individual goals. For instance, a research conducted by some master psychology students shows that a family members have a positive impacts in people's family. Also, the research suggests that a person with a family support have a better mental health than the person who does not have a family assistance. In this sense, today, a big family have many beneficial impacts in people life's.
In conclusion, take the above reason to account, I strongly believe that a extended family not only opens up a whole gamut of valuable experience and support personal goals, but also helps people to develop a good mental health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91304347826 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.804174927 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519181585678 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4349575655 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4761904762 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.619047619 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176103996234 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561864849504 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698569116367 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100870013311 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331279196477 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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