Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without doubt, family known as one of the crucial pillars of each society. Family is where children born, train and learn how to act in the society which determines community level of progress. Some people believe that in today's progressive life extended family has less importance than past, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, nowadays, small families are more popular than extended one for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that by increasing the cost in today's life, affording an extended family is really hard work. At first majority of people able to produce his own family food and instruct a shelter for them, but, when the world initiate to progress and the urban form of life has increase, human convert to be more consumer of everything rather than producer. As a result, the cost of everything such as food, building, and so on rises, which restrict people to live in small apartments instead of huge homes. Obviously, both living in limited space and unable to afford food for large number of family encourage people to leave extended families. For example, when I was kid, I was living in a huge house with a beautiful yard. In addition to my parents my family consisted of my grandparents, aunts, uncles, and their kids. Every year, we supply great part of our food by planting in our yard, also we could sell the extra part of these harvest and helped the family cost. As times went, most of our neighbors transform to the tall apartments which prevent our yard to use sun and produce a lot of pollution. Unfortunately, my parents decided to move one of these small apartments to afford our life's cost which destroy our family relation and separate me from my extended family. As you can see, increasing cost in today's life cause people to avoid extended families.
Second, majority of adults migrate to other places far from their home town to find job, which deprive them from having extended family. In today's competitive world there are more population than past which saturate the job opportunities in some areas. Therefore, when people graduated and searching for career to build their future, they have to go each city or country that could find job that get the people the chance to live with huge family. For instance, statistics show that than number of persons who leave their hometown for finding work in industrial cities are increasing every year. Researchers' investigation demonstrates that problem of finding job convenience people to not only migrates and live alone instead of getting married and have several kids, but also scatter the member of the family. Furthermore, living far from their family, which cause visiting them in a year, weaken the relation and emotion between family's member and leads to encourage people to have small families. If each city had more job opportunities, extended family would have its past importance.
In conclusion, I do believe that today's life estimates the vitality of extended family. Not only does cost increase, but also decreasing job opportunities in each town unable people from affording huge family. I think each human being should pay more attention to concept of extended family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 34, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
.... In conclusion, I do believe that todays life estimates the vitality of extended...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98696461825 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54806314044 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502793296089 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5887847134 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.583333333 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14343840755 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485024280249 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391072714115 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946976620774 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425664264711 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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