Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinion of celebrities, such as entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
The ability to have effect on people's opinion is one of the important responsibilities. By having effect on people's mind you could lead their lives to flourish. Some people believe that the celebrities point of view have significant impact on younger people then older one, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, celebrities could easily influence the youngster’s ideas for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that young people's opinion effected more by famous people as they are in the age that need to have a role-model. Older people have enough experience and interfere with various challenges which make them to well-rounded people. However, young people consider well-known people as their role model and imitate their behavior. For example, When I was in high school, I always wanted to be a successful basketball player. Michael Jello was the strongest basketball player in our city. I always appreciated him because of his power, success, and virtue. Therefore, not only I tried to play the same way as him, but also to think and shape my opinion like him. Considering him as my role-model radically change my mind and converted me to another person. If I had not considered him as my model, I would not change a lot.
Second, youngster’s idea alters through celebrities since celebrities seem more appealing to young people. When young people observe someone like artists in different characteristics they consider them more up to date person. Furthermore, as people always praise well-known people, it makes celebrities personality too attractive for young people. For instance, statistics demonstrate that youngsters change their ideas easily among the celebrities’ opinion. Researchers' investigation among two groups reveals that people who are in younger age base their decision on the celebrities’ point of view due to find famous people personality's more close to their curious features. Moreover, since the prosperity of celebrities shown in public all the time encourage young people to try behave like them. As you can see, young people change their mind through celebrities’ idea.
In conclusion, I do believe that famous people have significant effect on young people opinion. Not only youngsters consider them as their role-model, but celebrities also seem more appealing to them. I think young people should pay more attention on shaping their ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es seem more appealing to young people. When young people observe someone like artis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, mind you, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39790575916 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07841493697 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0199541135 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.652173913 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6086956522 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.39130434783 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181959351351 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617158579742 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509931616869 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124825736748 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00908450350568 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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