Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Traveling is very beneficial for today’s stressful life. In order to soothe down and remove the tension of difficulty of life, majority of people prefer to travel. Some people believe that they gain more profit by not traveling foreign countries, whereas, others hold an opposite opinion. In my view, traveling in our own country has several advantages for two noticeable reasons.
First, traveling in people's own country improve the quality of people's life. If people spend their money, expending in travel, in their own country, it will provide more taxes, which will be used for improving the people’s welfare. For example, I live in a country in which the rate of people's travel to foreign countries is not remarkable. Each year, citizens pay a considerable amount of money for their traveling in their own country, which consist of related fees for accommodation, visiting monuments, transportation, and so forth. Therefore, the available taxes for government are increased by means of inside traveling. As a result, government use citizens’ traveling tax for improving roads, public transportation, recovering monuments, and other useful targets. If people had not traveled in their own country, they wouldn’t gain such benefits.
Second, people increase job opportunities by traveling in their own countries. In other words, by rising the number of inside traveling more services would be provided for travelers which means more job chances will be created for people. For instance, long ago, in my country, statistic demonstrated a growing rate of unemployment, due to the fact people prefer travel to other countries instead of own country. As a result, government decided to provide more services, to encourage people to travel in their own country. Consequently, large number of job opportunities were generated to improve servicing quality and a lot of people initiated to work in restaurants, hotels, tour guide section, and so on. After a while, the new statistic represented low rate of unemployment, since several job positions was created. This experience proved me that people profit a lot by traveling in their own country.
In conclusion, though some people agree with foreign country traveling, I believe people gain a lot of benefit by traveling in their own country. Not only does quality of people's life improve, but also job opportunities increase. I think every person should pay more attention to traveling in their country, because its benefit returns to them.
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Suggestion:
...traveling in our own country has several advantages for two noticeable reasons. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38227848101 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01186459071 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506329113924 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8450115333 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.238095238 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353353747176 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14144545505 0.076458572812 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898158290119 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26232172508 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282796119901 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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