Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to the issue the importance of games, some people believe that adults need to have a game as the same children, because it has many advantages for them. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight.
First and the most important reason is that the game decrease out routine pressures, which adults have faced more in daily life. We are living in a stress-rich environment, so it is quite normal we need recreation for filling our spare time and being relaxed. For achieve this, playing game is the better solution, which allow us to be far from the reality for some hours. I think that there is not a better example then myself when I was studying to enter the university. At that time, I have to study many books, and some of them were difficult like history. When I was exhausted of memorize contents of books, play badminton with my close friends refill me with fresh energy to continue my studies. Although, I never won in these games, because my partnership was an excellent player in this field of sport, it had positive impacts on me for being relaxed.
A further point we must consider is that we can improve our relationship and communication with others by participating in team games, which does not depend on what age you have. Indeed, sharing laugh and fun can foster empathy, compassion, trust and intimacy with playing a game with others. In addition, it allows you to make more friends and be close more with others. I think that a small instance can give some light on this matter. In the university I always was a shy child, who was not able to make friend with others. However, joining in the university volleyball team allowed me to have more communication with others because the intimacy atmosphere in the team broke my ice easily.
Apart from point I made above, the game develops children’s minds and also it have the same function on adult. In fact, Intellectual games strengthen our brain power and allow us to better think and concentrate. Physical indoor games like table tennis or outdoor games like football lead our blood to circulate better in our body and allows us to burn excess fats, which are the main cause of many diseases like diabetes, heart attack, or even stroke. The biggest advantages of playing game lies in the fact that keeps us healthy and improve quality of our life.
All above evidence supports this undeniable fact that the game relieves our stress, improves our social skills, and keeps us health. In this way, it is possible may someone does not like to play the game, but no one can deny its advantages on adults’ life and spirits.
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Essay evaluation report by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...ght on this matter. In the university I always was a shy child, who was not able to make f...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...elops children's minds and also it have the same function on adult. In fact, In...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228733459357 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.162570888469 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793950850662 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047258979206 0.046263068375 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0869565217391 0.0685040099705 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119092627599 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0283553875236 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52035982974 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0245746691871 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00189035916824 0.00188951952338 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.0793950850662 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0113421550095 0.0209618222197 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170132325142 0.0139019557991 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2684.0 2387.08602151 112% => OK
No of words: 470.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71063829787 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.304255319149 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.223404255319 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140425531915 0.174417080927 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0787234042553 0.112833075102 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52035982974 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523404255319 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 61.4990542375 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3636363636 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7998830143 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.7040618956 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.26751592357 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2289777687 0.300154397459 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101265839953 0.103427244359 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0665584811145 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481465328908 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134157000621 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792829475994 0.114077575197 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430620768183 0.0781384742642 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.313650725199 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0407834432542 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147585189702 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500039567893 0.0618886996521 81% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...ght on this matter. In the university I always was a shy child, who was not able to make f...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...elops children's minds and also it have the same function on adult. In fact, In...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'apart from', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228733459357 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.162570888469 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793950850662 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047258979206 0.046263068375 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0869565217391 0.0685040099705 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119092627599 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0283553875236 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52035982974 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0245746691871 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.00189035916824 0.00188951952338 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.0793950850662 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0113421550095 0.0209618222197 54% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170132325142 0.0139019557991 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2684.0 2387.08602151 112% => OK
No of words: 470.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71063829787 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.304255319149 0.338922669872 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.223404255319 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.140425531915 0.174417080927 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0787234042553 0.112833075102 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52035982974 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523404255319 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 61.4990542375 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3636363636 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7998830143 48.84282405 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 43.7040618956 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.26751592357 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2289777687 0.300154397459 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101265839953 0.103427244359 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0665584811145 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.481465328908 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134157000621 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792829475994 0.114077575197 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430620768183 0.0781384742642 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.313650725199 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0407834432542 0.067059652881 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147585189702 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500039567893 0.0618886996521 81% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.