Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Government should spend money on the construction of new buildings rather than on the preservation of old buildings
Managing costs and dedicating funds to different sections has been a controversial issue among professionals. One of these concerns is whether a government should build new buildings or should preserve the old ones. Some are of the opinion that government should build new buildings while others disagree with this approach. I agree with the latter because of two main reasons, which will be elaborated in the coming essay.
First and foremost, on the list of government's responsibilities, taking care of the environment in which we are living ranks at the top. So it is crucial for the government to use the free land appropriately. If the government aims to build new structures every year sooner or later, it will run out of space for essential activities like having a park or hospital. Building new structures without caring about what is going on in the bio-diversity of our surroundings can take its toll in the long run. Every animal has a right on earth too. They need a place to live and feed, but not paying attention to their presence and building new structures can imbalance the environment and will undoubtedly harm nature.
Secondly, one important factor for each activity in government is paying attention to its cost. Old buildings can be useful if the government renovates and reconstructs them appropriately. Having the help of engineers, the government can manage to redesign and reuse old buildings in a cost-effective way. There will be no need for new and costly buildings to construct, and the budget can be dedicated to necessary sections like health and education. For example, I remember when our school became too old, and the facilities were not in their good shape and students could not use them .our principal was ambiguous between evacuating the building or renovating that. Finally, she decided to renovate, and with the budget she received from the administration, she redesigned the school .when students came back to school, they were happy because they loved that old building and they had many memories there and also the construction became were modern and usable.
To sum up, I believe government should take care of old buildings and renovate them. Not only does renovating help us to take care of our environment, but also it is cost-effective, and the extra money can be spent on more important activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02813299233 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97945951178 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537084398977 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7031745143 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313183851516 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108925546144 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103003682465 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205202656468 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999886720195 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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