Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

These days governments have numerous ways to support different fields, each has its own benefits and cons. I strongly believe that it is better for any government that supports sports teams like Olympic teams, in which they are representative of their country. I have two main reasons that I will bring in the following essay.
First, many of the younger generations have a lack of confidence so they don't have any specific goal in their life. In order to stimulate young ones, the government has many options to consider, and one of the best ones is supporting the Olympic teams. By doing such a thing, governments spread this idea through the younger individual that by participating in sports they are going to be supported, also it has other benefits for governments like becoming famous around the globe. A good example of this is the Olympic games, in which athletes from around the world participate in it, and governments heavily support their teams in order to take medals. Countries like Qatar that has no history, spending millions of dollar taking other country's athlete, this country even gives citizenships to athlete only because they want to be famous around the world, and also keep motivating their people especially the younger generation to participate in these teams. So by sponsoring Olympic teams countries seek many benefits from fame to keep their people happy and healthy.
Moreover, as technology improve day by day human also tend to become more stable, and this causes a lot's of problems for them. Health is one of the most important aspects of our life, however, we don't take it seriously. According to the data humans mostly suffer from diseases that are related to instability like hearth problems, diabetes, cancer, etc. A good way to motivate people and ask them to participate in sports is to give people a good example. One of the best ways for any government is to show their support through sponsoring sports teams. In this way, the government chooses the best way to encourage its citizen to participate in sports which resulted in the lowest health issue. From the money governments save because of this, they can build many libraries, sports centers, or even improve public transportation.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the fact that encourages governments to support the Olympic teams. I feel by sponsoring the Olympic teams, governments encourage the younger generation to participate in sport and also elevate public health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, i feel, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0512195122 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71517317638 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490243902439 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5984440994 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.055555556 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38888888889 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202877258271 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747804895492 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670474768692 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147942536489 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0480219662921 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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