Do you agree or disagree whit the following statements: governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
in today’s world, which countries are competing with each other in most of fields, one index that indicates country’s development; is sport. The reason of my word is that there are more people engaging with sport compare to art. You can see the difference, when Olympic games start suddenly everybody attract to it, so in my opinion governments should spend more money in their Olympic teams.
The first reason that come to my mind is that, actual spending money in this way is somehow an investment, by doing that, governments encourage their future generation to participate in sports rather than wasting their time. There are lots of Olympian champions who their Idol was an Olympian champions too. They had saw them, and had took them as their idol. One of the most interesting of this is Kylian mbape who is a French football player he said in one of his interviews that his idol was Cristiano Ronaldo. He is now source of inspiration for younger generations. What I am trying to say is that sport has a bigger impact in people in comparison to arts. Because from the beginning of the history art belongs to specific part of civilization.
The second reason is that sport in these days is an industry. There is huge amount of money floating in it. It helps government’s economy, and by that, it help poor people to have a better life for themselves. Example of this is Brazil, which is known by its perfect football players. These footballers are exported to other countries around the globe, which in the end it helps Brazil economy. Most of these footballers came from poor families and bad reputation neighborhoods and when they reach to a certain levels of football they start to repay their debts to societies which they represent. There are lots of example of this kind of people, but on the other hand I can not say the same thing about art.
In conclusion, although some people might agree to support art, I strongly believe that government should spend more money in sport. Because it is a source of inspiration and it will boost economy which in the end beneficial for both governments and people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75609756098 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64214995181 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533875338753 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2998483047 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3684210526 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15602688112 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044590604697 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781582567368 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117739912767 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809134554088 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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