Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a hectic schedule, most the people nowadays search entertainment platforms where they can get thrilled in a short time. That's why sports demand has been rising constantly throughout the world. Personally, I concur with the statement of giving priority to the sport's competition rather than creative handy craft by the government. I feel this way because of the two reasons which I explore in the following essay.
First, spending money on sports can generate huge revenue for the government. In this time, people are interested in a different sports game as they finding it exciting and fascinating, and willing to pay an even higher price to watch their favorite game, buying team jersey and other game-related stuff. This generated income can be advantageous for the government to cover a developmental budget of the other areas. In contrast, art though has importance to represent a culture of the society and creativity of the individual, arrest currently holds less focus on the youth adults. So, investing in a vapid field like arts more likely to waste money without getting a satisfactory outcome for the state.
Secondly, as sports attract diverse public either national and international, it can buttress the nation's economy. Many people might find the sports event as the best way to spend their quality time, so their arrival can give huge profits to other businesses like tourism, hotel, retail shop, etc. Besides, it will advertise the whole country on the global platform without paying a publicity price to the media.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that sports event is more crucial for the country development than arts. Since it harbors more wealth and establishes a country image in front of the whole world, the government should emphasized their fund greatly in the sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 294.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15986394558 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73850928546 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.524837075471 121% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.23408784 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.357142857 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0975101302479 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033858099189 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300124826299 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0589531454225 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283900477101 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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