Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is beyond doubt that sports are an integral part of our society. In this regard, having excellent athletes is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debate among scholars. Some contemplate that the field of art should be improved while others reckon sports should get more support. As for the writer's opinion, I subscribe to the notion by disagreeing that government should fund arts more as compared to athletics. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that sports represent the country's reputation. It is crystal clear that when events like the Olympics and the world cup happens, the country with more economic power wins due to the fact that they invest in their sportspersons. The expenses of maintaining good health are profound and require funding from government or private authorities. By spending money on them, people will get inspired and will get attracted towards a healthy life. Moreover, state-sponsored games bring revenues for the government. By way of illustration, a few years ago research conducted on team performance showed that the team of America always leads because the government sponsors them by 60% while the African government spends only 10% on athletics. That's why always loses. This clearly explains my point.
The second exquisite reason behind my belief is rooted in the fact that sports-like events unite nations. It is notable that during championship and matches, the majority of the nation takes interest in them and take an active part. People do gatherings and watch shows together. Players are always trending on social media and people come to watch matches even from different parts of the world. Thus, by promoting sports and spending money on them, the government gives an opportunity of uniting and acting as a nation. As a case in mind, in 2012, when Pakistan won a cricket match against India, the celebration lasts for 3 days. My family spent those days at my cousin's place and had a lot of fun. This example manifests my viewpoint.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer although the field of art is so diverse and emerging, sports are of much more significance. For the sake of brevity, a couple of reasons are worth reiterating; first, sports reflects a country's position, secondly, it unites nations worldwide. As a writer, I vehemently urge the government to fund athletics more. By doing so, the country will prosper.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as for, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06714628297 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79225677427 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604316546763 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8983541428 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2692307692 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0384615385 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192085038351 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423880355209 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045672350643 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111084756184 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460017105316 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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