Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A successful currier is a vital part of a person's life. Most of the students believe that studying at expensive universities plays a huge role in getting a good job. However, some profoundly trust their capability of interacting with surrounding people to flourish in their lives. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of this idea. As far as my opinion is concerned, I really think that the person's ability to connect well with people is more important than studying hard in school to be successful in the future. I believe this way because of several reasons, and I will mention two of them in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the more interactive we are with people, the more information we get. By meeting experts, you understand the demand of the real world even better, which can never be learned just by studying hard in school. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own personal example. 5 years ago, when I was in medical school I was a very limited person. I used to concentrate just on my studies and had no interaction with seniors or any other doctors working in the school. One day I was doing a group study with my class fellows and what I found as a hardworking student was astonishing that they know more about the topic we were discussing than I. Then I realized after their suggestion that I should start communicating with people in my field so that I could learn more about the update information and also the real-life scenario. After that day, I opened my self and overtime developed a skill to get along with people. Ultimately, that ability to relate well with people made me almost an expert in my field by the time of graduation. As a result, it played a strong role in becoming a senior doctor at work.
Secondly, the ability to work in a good relationship with colleagues as a team is key to success because it meets the demand of companies as they prefer employees who have teamwork abilities, especially when working on big projects. Interaction with colleagues also helps to develop problem-solving abilities, empathy for others, and a willingness to work together for a common good which is essential for the growth of the company. Drawing from my own experience I had in London when I went on a trip with a pharmaceutical company. I and my colleagues had to work there as an intern for a month but when we completed our task very efficiently in just 2 weeks I realized the importance of working together as a team. Ultimately, I concluded I can never prosper just with my knowledge if I do not interact with people.
In light of the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that a good connection with people is very important to flourish in life because you can not only learn about your field of interest but also will be preferred by companies. That's why I really think that people should have the ability to interact well with other people if they really want to excel in their currier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...successful currier is a vital part of a persons life. Most of the students believe that...
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Line 1, column 421, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...n is concerned, I really think that the persons ability to connect well with people is ...
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Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ut also will be preferred by companies. Thats why I really think that people should h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2482.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 534.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64794007491 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77040669387 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485018726592 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0895281499 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.913043478 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2173913043 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248672946173 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705217604412 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633148330716 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159827507359 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340069276889 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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