Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that with the advent of technology, television industry has advanced to an exquisite level. In this regard, the observation of influence of electronic media and shows on society is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars whether movies exert positive effects on people especially the young generation or affecting negatively. As for the writer's opinion, I subscribe to the idea by agreeing that movies and television are exerting negative effect on kids' behavior. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that the kind of bad language and violence shown in the movies now-a-days changing people's way of act. It is notable that there is always a bad character in a movie which uses inappropriate words and harm others to make a movie more interesting. However, this addition of negative role causes adverse impact on teen agers. Needless to say, when kids watch such shows, they use same kind of words and exhibit disruptive behavior to depict their refusal. By way of illustration, last weekend my son had a fight with a kid at school and his teacher told me the kind of language he was using. I instantly knew that it was the effect of a series of superhero drama, he was watching last week. That day, I realized the effect of adult movies on a teenage. Had I stopped him from watching that movie, his behavior would not have been so terrible.
The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that the perfect ending stories of the movies causes depression in young people. It is worth mentioning that in this modern world, people are so busy in their work that they barely give attention to their loved ones. By knowing that when people watch fiction movies showing the strong bonds between couples, they get really frustrated and want their relationship to be perfect as well. But, this is something not happens in non fiction world because in real life, a person has to make efforts to strengthen their relations. Ultimately, their imaginary thinking after watching a non fiction movie leads them towards depression. As a case in mind, 2 years ago, my brother under went through extreme depression due to his divorce. As he has imagined his life to be perfect like in movies, he got really disturbed when his life partner left him.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that although people learn a lot through educative movies and documentaries, the role of negativity attracts more. For the sake of brevity, a couple of reasons are worth reiterating; first, movies possess bad language and violence which changes kids behavior, secondly, it can cause depression due to happy scripts. As for writer's advice, I vehemently urge parents to watch the movies first to avoid the negative effects television exerts on kids. By doing so, their kids will behave.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, as for, as to, kind of, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2422.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81510934394 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58310713721 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522862823062 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 503.0 20.1344086022 2498% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2422.0 100.406767564 2412% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 503.0 20.6045352989 2441% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 103.0 5.45110844103 1890% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237890673578 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.237890673578 0.076458572812 311% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154571944571 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629311533552 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 252.8 11.7677419355 2148% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -430.61 58.1214874552 -741% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 198.3 10.1575268817 1952% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.16 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.26 8.01818996416 402% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 10.002688172 600% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 203.2 10.0537634409 2021% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 253.0 10.247311828 2469% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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