Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In contemporary society, people begin to pay much attention in the field of arts and sports. While some peole supposes that the goverment should devote money to support are, I have an opposite idea. With outcome and social influence considered, I do think that athletes should be fianaced by the giverment.

First of all, with the financial support from the government, athletes are likely to gain better grades in high-level sports competitions. With enough money, training facilities can be updated and elite trainers can be hired. Athletes with more scientific training methods have the possibility to improve their proformances during competitions. Take the example of Su Bingtian, an Chinese runner who broke the record of asian runners of the 100-meter race in the 2020 Olympic game. In the interview, Su mentioned that it was the support of Chinese government in better sports suits and training facilities that contributed to his huge success. Without these finances, he would not make such great achievements.

In addition, devoting money on athletics field can help to improve the national health level of ordinary residents. With more athetes performing well in world wide competitions, commmon people are supposed to be inspired by their perfromances. This idea can be illustrated by my personal experience. When I was a 10-year-old kid, the report of the first Chinese NBA player Yao Ming encouraged me to paly basketball. This kind of passion motivated me to keep playing this sports alomost every day after school. It is the devotion in sports that brings me a healthy body. In fact, such a example is not unique. People who are inspired by famous athletes and begin to paly sports are countless. Thus, with the money supported by goverment in athletics, it is believer that more people will engage in sports and the overall health condition will be further improved.

In deed, spending money in art field does contribute to producing more famous art pieces, but its effectiveness is still on doubt. What matters for arts is not the money, but the time and the social influence. Compared with arts, athletics are more eager for financial help.

In a nutshell, devoting money to support athletics by the government seems to be an plausible choice, since it can promote athletes to have better performances on world wide competitions and influence more people to participate in the soprts field to exercise themselves. That is way I am of the opinion of that governments are supposed to give more financial support to athletics.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, in fact, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12949640288 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8364246444 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517985611511 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.671528916 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1304347826 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253962304105 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070234319578 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497838551078 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15584025675 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031309231139 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, in fact, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments