Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
government has important impact on development of country , some government believes in spending more money to support arts, other government believes in supporting athletics. In my view, I believe in supporting athletics for the following reasons.
First, athletics has more audience than arts. sports with all it is different branches have most people interested on either participating or watching player teams. For example, In my country, if the Olympic succor team has match with other international succor team, all people bought the ticket one month before the match start. In order to watch the match live. others come from outside the city. However, if there is art exhibition, I notice that few people were attending that festival. As you can see, arts have less audience than athletics, with that in mind, government should pay more attention on supporting sports.
Second, increase chance for employee to get jobs. when government build different sport centers, most of them required operating hands either to build or to work in that center, on the other hand, arts can be performed in any building, and just need some audience. For instance, when the government decided to build a soccer stadium, they hired people to build the construction, more over, they hired people to work in the stadium. as i remember, all of them were without job till this project had been started. this experience taught me that, it is better for the government to invest their money in the construction of such project.
In sum, some government believe in investing money on arts, I believe on investing money on supporting athletics not because they have more audience, but athletics project will require more employee, this will help a lot of unemployed people. So it is better for government to support this type of project.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13377926421 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6994052843 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551839464883 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.197977618 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9375 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263564739127 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855886787515 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867516875849 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178818640765 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081580743832 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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