Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Government holds the responsibility to access the requisites of the society and allot its budget. However, when it comes to allocation of budget, there is always a controversy as to whether to allot it to a particular department or other. Some may support the fact that Government should spend more money for the art sector whereas some others may say that Governement should spend more for athletics. I support the later group which I will substantiate in the following essay.
First and foremost, art is the field that speak about the culture and tradition of a state/country. Art is a form of creativity and tradition that is unique to every region of a country. This uniqueness and purity should be preserved to uplift the interest as well as the life of the artists. People in the art sector are not paid well. I personally saw many of the regional arts like street plays, country music and instruments slowly deteriorate in my country. These were the ancient regional art forms of my native village. Due to poverty, those people had started looking for other jobs and the art forms doesn’t even exist.
Besides that, there is growing ignorance among the present generation to preserve the ancient art forms. The government should spend considerable amount of funds to preserve the ancient paintings and sculptures. Lot of ancient sculptures are deteriorating slowly due to environmental factors, lack of maintenance and funds. It is the sole responsibility of the government to preserve these valuable treasures. The government should conduct various exhibitions to preserve the ancient art forms, concerts to encourage the traditional , native country music. The exposure and encouragement through the exhibitions and concerts will bring those art forms and artists to limelight.
Secondly, athletics such as state sponsored Olympic programs bring lot of pride not only to the players but also to the country. But , they get lot of sponsorships from the non government organisations like shoe or energy drink companies. These fundraisers not only sponsor the tournaments but also for the players.
In conclusion , Government holds the responsibility to support both art and sports activities. Athletics such as state sponsored sport events are sponsored by lot of non government organisations and get recognition from the media as well. So the art formation groups require more support in terms of fund from the government.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25831202046 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0186661085 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506393861893 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.579614948 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.3913043478 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.60869565217 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212630900934 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587967924151 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544262700958 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125033484924 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657217573734 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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