Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays there are a controversial issues whether the governments should spend more money, such as supporting arts or supporting athletes. In my view is better that governments spend their money in athletes, sponsoring Olympics teams. I believes that this charity would beneficial for great amounts of people. In the following essay I will explain why I think so.
First, there many young people that are passionate with different sports, such as athletics, swimming, volleyball, and football. Most of the time they are disoriented because they do not have idea where they can go to request information to practice those sports. Most of those teenagers or youth have a great talent. As a result, government lost them because they cannot want to spend money creating institutions to prepare them. For example, I remember when I was in high school, I had a friend that he was passionate to be a famous football player. He had an amazing ability to play in the field. However he could not be a great football star because our high school did not have a football trainer to training him. The other day my old friend found me on Facebook and told me that if the government were spent money to create the football team he would been the best player in United States.
Secondly, should support all youth that are interested in practicing an sport. This could be spending money creating institutions or sponsoring Olympics teams. Many youth and trainers feel frustrated because they cannot achieve their dreams . As a result they start doing activities that are not beneficial for them, such as selling drugs and alcohol. The trainers also, quit because they do not have the tools or the equipment to train their students.Is for that reason that government should spend money to support people who have the talent and ability to being an excellent athlete.I remember when my brother was studying at the sport school of volleyball, all the students were mad because the school did not have the requirements to train them. There was not the volleyball balls and neither the uniforms to play in the championships. As a consequence, they decided to go to talk with the governor and explain him that team needed support to win in the championship. Since that day the government started supporting my brother's volleyball team until our days.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that government should spend their money to support athletes. They are of great importance for the future of our community and we have to help them to achieve their dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92523364486 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69796175189 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478971962617 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.080636198 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8181818182 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240268288466 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792705739921 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100804307113 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185641288543 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974927324924 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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