Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The significance of extended family has decreased within the years. A few years ago, many family used to live together sharing the same home, but nowadays it does not exist anymore. In the following essay, I will explain with two reasons why I believe so.
First of all, earlier all not direct member of a family shared a same house for a long period. In one home used to live parents, grandparents, aunts, cousins and so on. Within the past of the years different countries have passed difficult economic situations that have diminished the possibilities for many relatives to continue living together. As a result, families have taken the decision of move to enhance the quality of live. My personal experience is an example of this. About ten years ago when we live in Cuba, all my family lived together, my grandparents, my cousins, my parents, my aunts and my uncles. Since we emigrate to United States we had to separate and everyone had to rent their own house because the situation in this country is
different from the one we were used to. As you can see due to the economic situation my extended family was destroyed.
Moreover, extended family also have been affected because many people want independence once they get married. Young people do not want to live with member of their families because they do not want to be controlled by others. Living with their parents, aunts, or grandparents do not let them to act freely. For example, my brother is thirty years old. Since he got married he rent his own apartment and he is living with his wife alone. He does not enjoy living with others in a household. This is another example that show us how extended family has been destroyed and it is now less important than before.
In conclusion, for all that I mention above, I strongly believe that extended family is less significant now than it was previously. Many circumstances have decrease the value of extended family, such as economic situations and the independence than young people like.
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...different from the one we were used to. As you can see due to the economic situati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81896551724 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63661443868 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528735632184 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8090928217 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.85 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214570450453 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700678293216 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628731571089 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126110249714 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041159497268 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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