Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a world where people easily obtain different opinion on the internet, it is not only important to carefully use the idea,
but it is also important to think of how the ideas have been derived. Throughout history, many nations through conquering and intermixing with one another introduced their philosophies into
other cultures. Since every idea must be affected by thousands of other cultures, the given topic " governments should spend
more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams." can also be interpreted
as many different ways as the number of people on this Earth. By carefully interpreting the question, I have analyzed
the problem and have disagreed with two reasons. first, interests and popularities of sports event are able to make
a lot of related job and money cycle in country. second, it can enable people to relieve stress.
To begin with, it is important to spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams
because nowadays sports event is the most important entertainment for most of people in society. sports event make
people feel excited and people advocate and follow them. interests and popularities of sports event are able to make
a lot of related job and money cycle in country. regarding making related job and money cycle in country, it is
important to spend money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams. For example, In 2002, our country
held world cup. For this events, government invested a lot of money to build stadiums and infrastructures. And private company
also invested a lot of money to earn money through this sports event. A lot of investments were collected because of
popularity of sports event and these investments made a lot of economic value in our country. so, above the example clearly
illustrates that spending more money in support of athletics can make economic value in society.
In addition, it is better to spend more money in support of athletics because it can enable people to relieve stress. Nowadays
people are living a hectic and busy life and they are under the great stress. And there are few stress reliever in society.
Watching all kinds of sports event which are acted by athletes can help people to relieve stress. regarding relieve stress for
people in society, it is better to spend money in support of athletics. For example, a few years ago, government invested to
major sports such as soccer, baseball, basketball. so many teams of sports could be established. many teams stimulated
much more competition between each teams. much more competition enable to rise popularities from people. people began to enjoy
the sports events and could help relieve their stress. through this example, I believe that spending more money in support of
athletics can help people to relieve stress.
As societies develop, the paradigm can shift, ideas try to stay alive, adapt, and grow over time to meet
the need of contemporary societies. The given topic "governments should spend more money in support of
the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams." can also change as the society changes.
however, as things stand, I will disagreed for two reasons to meet the need of the community I have experienced.
first, interests and popularities of sports event are able to make a lot of related job and money cycle in country.
second, it can enable people to relieve stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2981.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 578.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15743944637 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8138621269 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384083044983 0.524837075471 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 921.6 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.300331858 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1612903226 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6451612903 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.29032258065 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 30.0 4.53405017921 662% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 33.0 5.5376344086 596% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298897406676 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846258318164 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116205761667 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103041680053 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131233287948 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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