Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe
In a world where people easily obtain different opinion on the internet,
it is not only important to carefully use the idea, but it is also important to think of how the ideas have been derived.
Throughout history, many nations through conquering and intermixing with one another introduced their philosophies into
other cultures. Since every idea must be affected by thousands of other cultures, the given topic " governments should spend
more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams." can also be interpreted
as many different ways as the number of people on this Earth. By carefully interpreting the question, I have analyzed
the problem and have disagreed with two reasons. first, it is good opportunity to advertise with nation's name. second,
it is able to encourage people to exercise and eventually can lead people to make healthier.
To begin with, it is important to spend money in support of the athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams
than arts because enough supports to athletics team can make better results in olympic. As state-sponsored team
makes better results, it is good opportunity to advertise with nation's name. regarding advertising the nation's name,
governments should spend money in support of the athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams. For example,
before starting the olympic, Korea governments investigated a lot of money to state-sponsored athletic teams
to gain better results in olympic. During the olympic, Korea teams made good results in many sort of athletic competitions.
So many country people who did not know Korea focused on korea's results and this enabled other county people
to know the existence of Korea. through above example, athletic teams enhanced recognition of nation's value in the world.
In addition, it is better to spend money in support of the athletics because it is able to encourage people to exercise
and eventually can lead people to make healthier. Nowadays people are living a hectic and busy life. they have no time
to exercise. spending money to support athletics can make opportunities to exercise to people. regarding making opportunities
to exercise, it is better to spend money in support of the athletics. For example, there was no gym in my society.
but governments built a gym near my house. I had a opportunity to exercise easily. through this investment for local gym
building, it lead our society to exercise and make more healthier.
As societies develop, the paradigm can shift, ideas try to stay alive, adapt, and grow over time to meet
the need of contemporary societies. The given topic "governments should spend more money in support of
the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams." can also change as the society changes.
however, as things stand, I will disagreed for two reasons to meet the need of the community I have experienced.
first, it is good opportunity to advertise with nation's name. second, it is able to encourage people to exercise
and eventually can lead people to make healthier.
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...rtunity to advertise with nations name. second, it is able to encourage people to ex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, in addition, sort of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29563492063 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00681008246 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.400793650794 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8638489141 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8518518519 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 28.0 4.53405017921 618% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 40.0 5.5376344086 722% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327369077788 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948085341695 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131335732664 0.0737576698707 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109556014838 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139999892088 0.0645574589148 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.