Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a world where people easily obtain different opinion on the internet, it is not only important to carefully use the
idea, but it is also important to think of how the ideas have been derived. Throughout history, many nations through
conquering and intermixing with one another introduced their philosophies into other cultures. since every idea must be
affected by thousands of other cultures, the given topic "it is more important for governments to spend money to improve
internet access than to improve public transportation." can also be interpreted as many different ways as the number of
people on this Earth. By carefully interpreting the question, I have analyzed the problem and have agreed with two reasons.
First, investing to internet can make a lot of money and related jobs in society. second, internet makes people's life
more convenient in society.
it is important to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation
because investing to internet can make a lot of money and related jobs in society. nowadays our society is based on
internet and technologies combined with internet are being developed from many industrial sites. As several technologies
are developed with internet, there are many jobs which are related to internet. Regarding related jobs and making money in
society, it has more benefits to spend money to improve internet access. For example, out government released the research
about the prominent jobs in the future. research indicate that about two thousands jobs related to internet will be made
after five years from now. also research indicates that these jobs will decrease the rate of unemployment and give more value
to society. through above the example, it is important to invest to improve internet access than to improve public transportation.
In addition, it is better to spend money to improve internet access because internet makes people's life more convenient in
society. we can easily access the internet with a few clicks and get a lot of information from internet. when we compare to
society which do not has internet, nowadays we thrive fast and convenient life. since internet makes our lives more convenient,
government should invest money to improve internet access for society. For example, when I was a student, I lived in countryside.
there are no private institutions for study. So I had no opportunity to go private institutions. but when I became a high school
student, due to internet I could take lessons at home without going institutions. it was a great chance for me and this was only
possible with help from the internet. it has such a huge influence on me that I think that it is better to spend money to improve
internet access than public transportation.
As societies develop, the paradigm can shift, ideas try to stay alive, adapt, and grow over time to meet
the need of contemporary societies. The given topic "it is more important for governments to spend money to improve
internet access than to improve public transporation." can also change as the society changes.
however, as things stand, I will disagreed for two reasons to meet the need of the community I have experienced.
First, investing to internet can make a lot of money and related jobs in society. second, internet makes people's life
more convenient in society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, for example, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 30.3222958057 280% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2875.0 1373.03311258 209% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 551.0 270.72406181 204% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21778584392 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.04702891845 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92354569145 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 145.348785872 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.399274047187 0.540411800872 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 917.1 419.366225166 219% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 3.25607064018 399% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 1.25165562914 719% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 2.5761589404 466% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 13.0662251656 222% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.046247479 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1379310345 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06452816374 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 30.0 4.09492273731 733% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 34.0 4.19205298013 811% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.27373068433 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380377894756 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11921155737 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109417684212 0.0662205650399 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132450139278 0.162205337803 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112748094186 0.0443174109184 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 63.6247240618 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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